And just like that, our relationship was over.

Discussion in 'Space Junk' started by Fenix, May 12, 2009.

And just like that, our relationship was over.

Discussion in 'Space Junk' started by Fenix, May 12, 2009.

  1. Fenix

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    We'd been together for four or five years. Our mornings together were always a bright point on the day. I'd roll out of bed, groggy and snarly, and without fail, she was already up. She'd offer me a cup of coffee like it was a tire iron, beating the monkey off my back like Gordon Freeman with a vorpal crow bar. I'd wander off to the shower and start my day. Sometimes we'd spend a quiet evening together, just enjoying an evening on the patio. Other times, camped out in my office, with her spurring me on, like a demonic frenzied muse, as I trolled and fomented whatever internet board I was bent on terrorizing. Politics, religion, travel, guns, food, she didn't care. We were good for each other. Without a doubt, it was love, in every sense of the word.

    But I never saw it coming. No warning signs. No outbursts. No arguments.

    She was waiting for me in the kitchen as usual, but offered nothing to my morning grunt of greeting. She just looked at me, impassively.

    "What's wrong?" I asked. "Is everything ok?"

    Silence.

    "I don't understand, please talk to me." Trying to shake myself awake. It was still pretty early.

    Everything about her was cold and hard. Realization hit me like a sheet of ice cold water. And just like that, our relationship was over.

    I didn't know what to do. I was lost. I tried to hold her, to touch her in familiar ways that she might react in some manner that wouldn't break my heart, to rekindle the warmth I knew had to still be there. The pit in my stomach felt like a black hole, threatening to consume my existence, this cold fire of despondency slowly building in me. I was a see saw of emotion. Anger, guilt, desire, hunger, need... loss.




    So I tossed my broken coffee maker and picked up a new Arabica French Press. I'll let you know how it works out.
     
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    bralbers New Member

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    waaaa! sniff that's so sad. will there be a funeral?
     
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    :( my condolences.
     
  4. Lucratus

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    Man that sucks dude:(. i'm sorry.
     
  5. darkone

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    You bastard, you had me tearing up over a coffee pot, what is a matter with you?
     
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    geez, Darkone.
    The least you could do is pretend to be sad.
     
  7. Aurora

    Aurora The Defiant

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    Fenix! >_<
    I was so close to thinking it was either real, or that you had become a good writer. Then that ending shows up.
    Still, that was pretty good writing. Did you make that, or somebody else? Respect if it was you.
     
  8. darkone

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    Oh I'm sorry, maybe I wasn't clear enough.

    I was sad.
     
  9. Fenix

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    Are you saying I'm a bad writer?

    :(
     
  10. LanceLeader

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    Verdict: Guilty of not displaying fake sadness.

    Edit: You were right. I was blinded.

    Charges dropped.
     
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  11. EonMaster

    EonMaster Eeveelution Master

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    lol, nice story Fenix

    I figured it would be something strange since it was poste in space junk
     
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    omgosh bravo!!

    im going to compose a song about this now!!! xD
     
  13. darkone

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    Fenix, the story itself was very well told, I thought it was pro at first. I just didn't like the meaning, but bravo just the same.
     
  14. Fenix

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    I like my coffee like I like my women.

    Covered in bees.
     
  15. darkone

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    ...
     
  16. bralbers

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    How would you drink coffee covered in bees?
     
  17. Fenix

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    Magic.
     
  18. Aurora

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    Paladin magic?
     
  19. Light

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    Liar, liar, pants on fire!
     
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    Something must be wrong with me, because I was sure it's not about a woman form the beginning >.>