Re: 18) Tassadar's sacrifice

Discussion in 'The Arts' started by -LT-, Oct 11, 2007.

Re: 18) Tassadar's sacrifice

Discussion in 'The Arts' started by -LT-, Oct 11, 2007.

  1. -LT-

    -LT- New Member

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    It's good. I like it.
     
    -LT-, Oct 11, 2007
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  2. BnechbReaker

    BnechbReaker New Member

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    um.. i felt that quite a few of the versus didn't really rhyme
     
    BnechbReaker, Oct 11, 2007
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  3. NateSMZ

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    I'm not sure if the broken rhyme technique was used on purpose or not - but regardless, I've rarely liked it. There's really only a few possibilities where the jarring it creates is useful towards establishing a point... and I don't think this poem was one of those places. decent work... feels almost like you might've been working thru a language barrier actually... good effort - pz
     
    NateSMZ, Oct 12, 2007
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  4. PKZeppelin

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    That's awesome ! :thumbup: :good: :powerup:
     
    PKZeppelin, Oct 19, 2007
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