this is very cool, a poem doesn't need many words to convey a message or a feeling, most have heard of the short iapanese haikus and nearly every single classic chinese poem is 4 lines long, but conveys a lot of meaning.
I don't think this really has anything to do with haikus or an asian style of poetry. Just a classic excerpt with a thoughtful twist. It's really rather creative.
Yeah, but I think if you read the "but my heart is for you" in a Zealots voice makes it un-Zealotty. ;D
I actually like this. The writer is an intelligent person. I say that because they entered the endeavor with the intent of just throwing something together.... but it came out with memorable lines anyway now, I could be wrong - this could be the product of hours of intense labor... but that's the feeling I get... wasn't trying that hard - just wanted to have fun... but something interesting happened anyway and so I say to you, if you ever want to be a poet - you could prolly do it...... this won't win a noble peace prize... but then again, nothing posted here would - so well done sir
